WiP: Completed draft of first book of trilogy!

Finally got pass this hurdle. Completed the first book of the trilogy (First draft). Only took me a year to do. Reluctantly, I was not as productive as I would like to have been but its done.

I am rewriting the book that I published in 2014. In 2015, I wrote a screen play of the story but modified large parts of the story to work in a movie. I liked what I did so much, I decided to rewrite it, extend it and add sub-plots to it.

My goal is to write all three books, then write screen plays of them, and finally, modify the books to conform to the screen plays. If I am lucky, get Hollywood to purchase the story and book publishers to make the books.

 

Saviors: A new Sci-Fi Universe

I have started another universe based on an idea I have had about an alien race coming to Earth and “uplifting” us to a space faring race.  Some would say why would anyone ever do something like that.  Most people are not that kind. Ah, but what if its not really out of kindness but because they have a need?

This novel will start with the aliens telling us why they are giving us a hand up. Let me know what you think?

Saviors

They came as civilizers, they said. Ya, civilization always screws the natives. In this case, we, humanity, are the natives. The Valodars came 10 years ago to much fanfare. Acting all high and mighty, they first tried to change us by appealing to our nobler side. Well, we never really were good at listening. So they then forced our primitive cultures to stop warring and fall under a one world government.

That showed us their true nature. They can kick ass with the best of em. They did a good job of destroying most of our military forces in a quick and violent set of strikes. Before we even knew what hit us, we were trashed and at their mercy. They then brought down their armored troops and made us see the errors of our ways.

Ya, civilized. The more civilized one gets the more violent the destruction they reap.

But then the Valodars or squidlies as we started to call them, shocked the shit out of us. Once they forced us into a one world government of their choosing, they started to teach us their technology. In the 6 years since our “education” began, we have been given warp capabilities, alright they call it phased translocation. But it still seems like Star Trek.

They helped us build star ships that could move around the solar system in hours. They gave us powerful propulsion systems, artificial gravity, nano technology, many wonderful technologies. They showed us how we can control these systems with our minds.

We have sent explorer ships to the neighboring stars and have found planets that could support life. We were planning on colonies light years away. Building space stations and habitats on the other planets in our system, Sol.

These were heady times. Man had found a true friend that freed us from our terrestrial bonds.

Or so we thought.

Rewrite of Wall of Destruction

Today was the first day in a while I could write. Just wasn’t feeling it.  I am rewriting Wall of Destruction to make it match the Wall of Destruction screenplay.  My goal is to not only incorporate the screenplay story line but also to add more about some sub-plot stories. I was initially thinking to write them as separate books but recently decided to make them part of these books.  I imagine it will still be two books, maybe three but not sure where I would break out the third book. In the end, all the sub-plots will roll up into the final battle of book two.

So here is my first draft of the opening scene of the new Wall of Destruction.  Would love comments.

Wall of Destruction, Opening Scene

The men stood silently, as an air battle raged above them. All attired in various styles of armor. Swordsmen with breastplate, shield and helm. Archers, with bow, quiver and short sword. Infantry men with leather brigandine and large Aether spears.

Finally, there were the armored troopers. Men in Aether-powered armored suits that covered them head to toe. They also carried Aether spears.

All of these soldiers, had the symbol of a Trident, with a fist imposed over it, on their chest. The look of battle hardened veterans, they sat their awaiting the enemy. Slightly in front of the front row, stood a beautiful woman in leather brigandine. A haughty look, with her hair flowing freely in the night’s breeze. Arms crossed, she stood there staring intently down the beach.

This force stood between the waves and dunes, facing up the beach. The air battle above them raged on between the vailixi of Atlantis and Luxa. The final battle of the civil war was playing out.

The distinctive whirling noise of the vailixi gets louder. Many look up to see a pair of vailixi starting their strafing run on the closed ranks of the force. They get in a few shots before Luxan vailixi attack them and force them to peel off. Three Luxan vailixi chase the two Atlanteans over the dunes and further inland. An explosion is soon heard.
A few of the troopers are killed in the attack but the line remains intact. They stare up the beach, awaiting the enemy, they know is coming.

Three Luxan vailixi race pass the formation, going up the beach and out pass the dunes. In the distance, a stream of soldiers come onto the beach from the dunes. They start to form a battle line facing the Luxans.

The Luxans stay stone faced silent while the Atlanteans complete their formation. The Atlanteans were mostly Infantry men with few swordsmen or archers. There were roughly an equal number of armored troopers for each side.

The Atlanteans also had a symbol of a Trident on their chest. Just a Trident. They started to move down the beach towards the Luxans. A chant started to pick up to Poseidon, patron god to Atlantis.

The woman of Luxa wore a device on her arm. It started to beep and she brought it to her face. A soft glowing image appeared to talk to her. She nods her head and then turns to the line of men. A soldier steps forward with a horn and blows three blasts.

The woman and the soldier step back into the ranks as large massive shields are brought forward and dug into the ground. The formation closes as the men make themselves as small as they can behind the shields.

The Atlanteans slow their pace and look on in confusion. Their former brothers in arms now cower behind large shields. This was not an action of the rebel forces they were used to. Separated by idealogical differences, they were still trained the same.

The Atlanteans start to increase their pace forward again. Their leaders, spurring the men on, thought to close with the enemy before, whatever plan they have can be enacted.

The Atlanteans cover half the distance to the Luxan force when a blinding light occurs. Before the Atlanteans can react a massive boom, then a powerful wind lifts them off their feet and throws them towards the Luxans. Cries of pain and shouts of alarm from those blinded or burned. A few are still moving. Some get to their feet, Aether spears, shields and weapons forgotten. Only the pain.

The armored troopers pick themselves up and look around confused. Most of their force has been decimated in the explosion. All know now what the Luxans were up to, they used the Hand of Ares on Atlantis.

The woman stands up a few feet behind the great shields and bellows her war cry. A great cry rises up among her men as they rise and push pass the shields in a full out run towards the enemy. Infantry men and armored troopers fire their Aether spears while archers let forth arrows. All are racing forward to the confused and dazed Atlanteans.
Some Atlanteans realize the danger and start to fire back but most are down with Aether shots before the Luxans reach them. Scattered with many Atlanteans still struggling to get up, the Luxans roll over them like the tide rolls over the beach.

Few can defend themselves and the Luxans butcher them to a man. The woman is walking forward after her men as they continue up the beach pass the slaughtered defenders. In the distant dark, the glow of fires caused by the Hand of Ares. While night, the outline of a large cloud rises into the darkness. The night stars of the gods have been blotted out.

Many Luxan vailixi stream forward over head. Heading to the doomed city of Atlantis. The war is over and Luxa has destroyed Atlantis. 30,000 years of Atlantis has ended in one night with the weapons of the gods.

From the Web: Author Earnings Bi-Annual Report

From the website Author’s Earnings, comes their bi-annual report on who is selling. In a slightly non-technical explanation: They use bots to query Amazon, Barnes & Noble or other major eBook retailers to query for top selling lists and the books on them. Then, they crunch the numbers, in a very cool and easy to read report. I like the information they provide.

What were their findings in this May’s report? They queried Amazon this time.

may-2015-combined-titlecount

The Indie publisher and self-published categories continue to grow.  While it does not say they are making a fortune, there is still a chance. That chance continues to grow, in time, as the Internet continues to change how we consume content.

I believe the way to go is to publish many books of quality content. Whether through a publisher or through self-publishing, publishing many books is much better than a single one. The goal being to give a reader, who liked your content, a chance to purchase additional stories by you.

Having said this, I believe one goal of writers would be to “build a universe” around the story. Not every story could have this, but many could. Invest the time to build background, subplots, pre or post stories, art work or movie scripts. These items could enrich the story, to the enjoyment of the reader.

They would force you, the writer, to think of the whole story. They could also be sold as separate entities. Short stories explaining a sub-plot or how something came to be, could be submitted to short story magazines. Many of them could then be added to anthologies.

The goal would be to engage the customer in many different perspectives of your story. Give them a chance to fall in love with it and buy everything they can. Like a music artist. Most bands do not have a single song nor do they put out only the one killer song. They try to get many songs out there, in CD format or electronic. They sell shirts and other things. The idea is to capitalize,as much as possible, off your art.

The more business savvy you are, the more likely you can make a career out of your ideas. That is my goal.

Another passage from the book

Hello here is another piece of the book.. Would love some comments.

 

The day after the return from Kanesa, the council decided on a river valley as the new home, in the vicinity of what is now Nashville. Of the seven vailixi, five were used for airlifting of workers, equipment and supplies to the new valley. The idea was to build out long houses as used by many of the local tribes and then start moving the people. This will keep the majority of the people in relative comfort, in Altai, while the new homes were being built. The people of Altai still had enough aether tools and the knowledge to move objects to build these structures fairly quickly and with limited manpower.

Altai made the report of the Kanesa colony’s situation and Atlantis said they would look into it.

“My Lord Tolloc, will Atlantis be able to spare a Mother Stone for us and Kanesa? As well as the priests to maintain them? It would greatly speed up the stabilizing of our colonies.” Rosan said.

Lord Tolloc was First Minister of the Empire and the ear of the Emperor. He was also a leader of the Shigar party and not very friendly to the Tarnor family or the Nalos party. “I am sorry my lord, we can not spare any Mother Stone at this time. Between the rebuilding of Atlantis and Aiini, it is taking all we have left. Surely you understand the importance of these two cities over some of our remote colonies?”

“Yes Lord Tolloc, we understand and will make do with what we can until we can receive help from Atlantis. How is the Imperial family, my Lord?”

“The Imperial family is fine, the Emperor does wonder why Altai has not sent more of the vailixi to supplement the defenses of Atlantis. I assured him it was no slight to the throne, that you and your council believe they are needed to help Altai survive.” With a very serious look on his face, “I do not know if I can keep saying that for long Rosan. Eventually he might order that you and the council come explain yourselves to him directly. That would really be a shame.”

The threat was understood. “First Minister, should we abandon our colonies on this side of the Home Ocean and return to Atlantis? This would ensure the vailixi and troopers are available for reassignment quicker as they just have to ferry all the people to Atlantis.”

A look of disdain came over Lord Tolloc’s face as he realized the disruption that a large number of additional Nalos supporters in Atlantis, would cause. “No I do not believe that is necessary Rosan, I will work on the Emperor. The colonies of Altai and Kanesa are important to the Empire, we do not wish to abandon them.” Fidgeting in his chair, “You shall have your time. Another ten days should suffice. Since we have destroyed the Rama we can take apart their allies at a more leisurely pace.”

“Thank you First Minister, what of the news of our other colonies, have they suffered as we have?”

“Some have and some haven’t. I am sorry Lord Tarnor, matters of state await me. Please file your report on the status of rebuilding Altai. Your people need not worry about Kanesa any longer, we will send support and then deal directly with them.” As he vanished from the viewing screen.

Passage from book

Finalizing my crowdsource request for contributions to getting the book published on Indiegogo.com    Here is one of the passages from the book that I am using in the campaign.

Flee for your lives!

Risor awakens to the tolling of the bells and yelling coming from the streets below. Racing to the hallway, he meets other family members and servants. Everyone is demanding to know what is going on, with servants charging off in all directions to try and get some answers. Rosan orders everyone back to dress and prepare a few changes of clothes.

Maybe the Ramans have finally decided to strike the Atlantean colonies on this side of the world. Risor quickly dressed and went down to the house courtyard below. Servants were hustling back and forth with his father directing actions. A small stack of bags and such were already gathered in the courtyard.

“What is going on father?” cried Risor.

“We do not know yet but the order is to evacuate to the hills.”

In moments, an officer of the town guard comes through the front gate with one of the servants sent to find out what is going on.

“My lords, Sub-commander Ruland. We are ordering an evacuation of the city. There is a great flood coming from the north and it will be here in one to two hours. Please gather what you can easily carry and head out the Morning Gate. It will be the quickest way to the hills.” turning to Rosan. “Elder Councilman Tarnor, Councilman Zailor advises the council should meet at Sun’s Farewell bluff as soon as possible. We will maintain that as our headquarters until the crisis is over.”

“Sub-commander, what of the vailixi? I have some of my unit here.” Risor asked.

“All of the vailixi are in the air going north or to Sun’s Farewell bluff as part of the command hub. I believe that means your craft as well, sir.”

Rosan put his hand on Risor’s shoulder. “Son, I need you here to help me with our household.”

“I will stay father, but I need to make sure that my people are okay. Thank you sub-commander.” As the guardsman saluted and then left.

“Flood eh?” Risor remembered what Tolen said. “Father if this is related to what Tolen told us before, it could be very bad.”

“Yes he told us too. We need to get everyone moving.”

Within fifteen minutes, the family, servants and baggage was on the move. While not running, especially since it was still a long distance, the group moved quickly. Along with hundreds of other fleeing residents.

Within the city proper, the streets are well lit and it was easy to see dropped items that someone before them had second thoughts about taking. The streets were strewn with debris from those fleeing. Luckily for the Tarnors, their home opened onto one of the main thoroughfares and they quickly exited the city gate.

The road was lit for a ways but soon the city lights were no longer available. Hundreds were on the road to the hills with all manner of wagons or animals as beasts of burden. Risor would not mind having one of the aether wagons at this time, that would allow them to pretty much run along side the road a few feet off the ground. They couldn’t stay on the road with all the other people but as long as the ground near the road was flat they could use that.

With only star light, the occasional torch or aether light to light their way it was pretty scary for those fleeing. They moved on pretty much in silence so they can hear when the waters are coming. The silence was broken by vailixi occasionally flying overhead with their aether lights beaming along the road. The light showed how much junk was already thrown to the sides as people feared not making it and threw their belongings away to move quicker.

Risor believes they were half way to the hills when up ahead an animal bellowed and then an aether spear shot the beast. Many of the animals near Risor’s family were getting skittish, which Risor thought meant the flood is getting closer. He had heard Tolen say that animals have a sense, like those who control the use of aether, to detect when danger is coming.

When they got to where the beast was killed, they saw a group trying to remove it from the road.

“Citizens, leave it, it is to one side and there is little time. Pick up your gear and move on.” Said Rosan to the crowd.

The people didn’t seem to need much convincing, they dropped their holds on the beast and moved on.

“Father, the beast will still block any larger wagons coming up the road.” Rina finally spoke, she seemed in a state of shock since leaving their home.

“Honey, any wagon that big will not move quickly with all these people in the way and if it did, it would more than likely run people over.” When she didn’t say anything, he added, “Better that one wagon be left than many people harmed in the driver’s attempt to reach safety.” Again no response.

Wall of Destruction Preview – Draft Version

Wall of Destruction Preview v1

Already well into writing the novel but thought I would include a preview. It is still a draft version but I would love to get some feedback.

To publish it will require professional artwork and editing. Even more if I try to have it translated. These costs add up, so I am considering crowdsourcing. I have investigated some of the crowdsourcing sites and it seems that Indiegogo is the best international service. So comments will be invaluable.

My goal for now will be to publish it electronically.

Why is Wall of Destruction my first book?

DSC02606A few years ago I picked up a book by Graham Hancock called “Fingerprints of the Gods” that changed the way I thought of history. I have been a history nut since my school days but in this book Mr. Hancock challenged the orthodox views of how civilization progressed. I was hooked.

Many of the arguments made sense to me and I started reading more from Mr. Hancock and others that wrote of similar views. One of the biggest challenges to these views was, “where is the evidence?” Many things mentioned by these writers had little corroborating information or not enough to stir the archaeological community to further investigate.

Where is the evidence? Maybe in the ocean. Since the last ice age, sea levels have risen over 150 feet globally. Large swaths of land that used to be shore side are now under tens or hundreds of feet of water. The Persian Gulf used to be a river valley, Florida used to be about twice its size, Sundaland was a landmass that included large swaths of Southeast Asia and the Gulf of Mexico was half its size and more a bay with small waterways connecting it to the Atlantic Ocean.

Then you look at human nature and you notice that we really love to build cities near the coast or along rivers. We always have. Almost all ancient cities were near bodies of water because we need water to survive. Especially nice places were river deltas, building a city as close as you can to a delta really gave you an advantage. The land is more fertile, you have access to the seas and trade. Just a sweet place to put down some roots.

Until the sea levels rise that is. Once the seas start flooding your crops or even your house, it tends to make the place uninhabitable and less desirous. Storms cause more damage and water gets caught in tidal pools that, due to stagnation, might cause disease and all that other fun stuff.

If you do have cities, you have specialization of skills. I myself am an IT engineer, not a farmer or hunter. I might have some of those skills or learn quickly but what if I am dropped into an area without more than I can carry? If I left in a hurry, did I bring an axe? food? water? clothes? If I did, did every one else? Will I have to fend off other starving people for the food and tools I did bring? If I am fending them off, can I continue to feed myself?

Leaving the environs of a city quickly might also cause the loss of industry and the devaluing of specialization. Can you make the tools you need or did the tooling systems you require sink with the city? Could you even stay in large, organized groups? Might you have to break up into smaller and smaller groups to have a chance to feed your group? Non-survival skills then become unused and eventually forgotten.

How could a civilization die? I think these could be causes of an advanced society reverting to hunter gatherers. Just need to find some evidence of city remains. The cool thing is they are starting to look in the oceans and are finding things that are questioning the current story of man.

This is one of the premises in Wall of Destruction, a “When Atlantis Fell” saga. Something happens to cause the cities to be abandoned and the survivors need to learn to “go native” to survive. As this is a book of fiction, I also took the liberty of using stories of Atlantis and other ancient  tales to build my civilizations.

I will add more about it in the coming posts.