What to write next?

So finally, Wall of Destruction is on all the eStores I plan on putting it on. Only thing now is to get a paperback edition set up on Lulu.com. Which I hope to get there this week or next (depends on the errors I need to clean up).

So what to write next? Not sure if part two of this story, which continues Risor’s tale and the struggle for New Altai to survive, is what should be next. I also want to tell some of the sub-plot stories that really didn’t add to the main story.

Like Rogat, a friend of Risor, who is a soldier in the Atlantean military and is serving in what is now Eastern Europe. How he has to deal with the destructive forces unleashed and the Raman allies, the Dolrinas and Greeks.

Or the Atlantean rebels of Moia and Utano and why they rebelled.  Following Commander Shandar Kotan of the Flying Dragon squadron through their struggle for independence.

Stories like this or move on to something else altogether. I have other universes I want to explore and write about. Even genres, should I try to write horror? action? romance? Not sure. I would like to experiment to see how well I do but is that something to do now or later?

Taking a break from the Atlantis stuff while I await some feedback.  I have been building some background on a Sci-Fi universe where humanity has become an empire and discovered worm hole travel. They do not have ways to travel quickly between the stars without the worm holes, in fact they can only get up to a portion of the speed of light.

So they need to send remote controlled starships slowly out to our neighboring stars with worm hole endpoints. Once these ships arrive at these neighboring stars they drop off one of the endpoints and humanity can then travel to that star, instantaneously. The explorer ship then continues on its way to another star. So humanity expands very slowly because we do not have a way to explore near or above light speed.

What do you think? I would love to hear your views on which road to take. Also would love some feedback on Wall of Destruction.

Thanks.

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First draft completed

Yeah!!!   Finished the first draft.  Now the editing.

Might have more to add though, I have been reading a lot of stuff lately that jumps between different story lines and I kinda like that. Not too crazy, but may be between two or three characters. Hoping for an October completion date and then see what I can do about getting a professional edit of the book.

 

Here is another snippet from the “Wall of Destruction”

That evening Risor decided to contact New Altai. The communications ring was nearly drained, so he had to keep the contact short and audio only.

Milo was on duty at the time, “Sir, it is good to hear from you again. How are things going?”

Risor said, “Good to hear from you too, Milo. We are doing better. I don’t think we are being followed anymore but we are still being cautious. How are you and our new city?”

“Doing fine sir, the people are still getting used to doing things the new way but settling in. Where are you now?”

“We believe we are about three weeks out still. Near the foothills of the mountains but heading north now. How is my family?”

“Glad to hear that sir. Your family is fine, I will tell them that you are well. Fordo and his group are about a week away, they estimate.”

“Glad to hear that. No enemy contact? For you or Fordo?”
“No sir, they are having a grand old time.”

“Good, hope we can start doing that. How is Demara?”

Chuckling, Milo said, “Demara, eh? Not the rest of us? I was wondering why she was acting that way last time you checked in.”

“What do you mean, my friend?”

“You will see when you get here.”

Risor sighed, “I see. Okay if you are going to be that way.” Laughing, “I need to close this now. The ring’s power is almost gone. I might not be able to check in for a while. I figure another week or two then we will. Take care my friend.”

Milo said, “You too sir, be safe.”

Risor stared at the ring for a minute after breaking the connection. He was thinking of Demara and remembering her face from the last visual call they had. Yes, he would like to see her again and see what Milo was talking about.

Another passage from the book

Hello here is another piece of the book.. Would love some comments.

 

The day after the return from Kanesa, the council decided on a river valley as the new home, in the vicinity of what is now Nashville. Of the seven vailixi, five were used for airlifting of workers, equipment and supplies to the new valley. The idea was to build out long houses as used by many of the local tribes and then start moving the people. This will keep the majority of the people in relative comfort, in Altai, while the new homes were being built. The people of Altai still had enough aether tools and the knowledge to move objects to build these structures fairly quickly and with limited manpower.

Altai made the report of the Kanesa colony’s situation and Atlantis said they would look into it.

“My Lord Tolloc, will Atlantis be able to spare a Mother Stone for us and Kanesa? As well as the priests to maintain them? It would greatly speed up the stabilizing of our colonies.” Rosan said.

Lord Tolloc was First Minister of the Empire and the ear of the Emperor. He was also a leader of the Shigar party and not very friendly to the Tarnor family or the Nalos party. “I am sorry my lord, we can not spare any Mother Stone at this time. Between the rebuilding of Atlantis and Aiini, it is taking all we have left. Surely you understand the importance of these two cities over some of our remote colonies?”

“Yes Lord Tolloc, we understand and will make do with what we can until we can receive help from Atlantis. How is the Imperial family, my Lord?”

“The Imperial family is fine, the Emperor does wonder why Altai has not sent more of the vailixi to supplement the defenses of Atlantis. I assured him it was no slight to the throne, that you and your council believe they are needed to help Altai survive.” With a very serious look on his face, “I do not know if I can keep saying that for long Rosan. Eventually he might order that you and the council come explain yourselves to him directly. That would really be a shame.”

The threat was understood. “First Minister, should we abandon our colonies on this side of the Home Ocean and return to Atlantis? This would ensure the vailixi and troopers are available for reassignment quicker as they just have to ferry all the people to Atlantis.”

A look of disdain came over Lord Tolloc’s face as he realized the disruption that a large number of additional Nalos supporters in Atlantis, would cause. “No I do not believe that is necessary Rosan, I will work on the Emperor. The colonies of Altai and Kanesa are important to the Empire, we do not wish to abandon them.” Fidgeting in his chair, “You shall have your time. Another ten days should suffice. Since we have destroyed the Rama we can take apart their allies at a more leisurely pace.”

“Thank you First Minister, what of the news of our other colonies, have they suffered as we have?”

“Some have and some haven’t. I am sorry Lord Tarnor, matters of state await me. Please file your report on the status of rebuilding Altai. Your people need not worry about Kanesa any longer, we will send support and then deal directly with them.” As he vanished from the viewing screen.

Where would an Ice Age civilization be?

 

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 Pic from US Govt, EPA.

During the Ice Age, the ice shelves contained significant amounts of water resulting in the sea levels approximately 150 feet below where they are today. This extended the shore line in many places, tens or hundreds of miles from where they exist today.

Places like New Orleans would be far inland and more akin to Vicksburg or Natchez, Mississippi. So, more fertile plains, not wetlands. During this time frame, the Mississippi was also much larger than it is today. Then, the river would have normally been around seven to eight miles wide. To see the far coast would have been impossible, standing on the shore, due to the curvature of the earth.

Deltas would have extended out into this land being the most fertile while the upper lands of this old shore line would not have been as fertile. This Ice Age coastline would also be very flat, possibly ideal for farming. Allowing small towns and villages to farm, hunt, fish and trade.

If a civilization was settling the world back then, they would most likely settle along the coasts.  Coasts and rivers would allow trade back to their home city and provide a means to feed a larger population.  Settlements near water for a global civilization would allow the population one last defense, fleeing via the sea.

A global civilization would be great seafarers and explore the world. Throughout history, nations of seafarers have explored far and wide. This would probably be true of any nation before known history,too. Most of these seafaring societies stayed near water, which would probably be true of a prehistoric civilization as well.

In Wall of Destruction, this is how my Atlantean civilization works. They are a global civilization of seafarers with colonies near the coasts and along major rivers. They trade with other peoples near their colonies.

A passage from the book with a little information on this civilization (vailixi is the Atlantean flying craft powered by aether):

 “Tilor, let them know we are returning and our status.” Risor smirked, if Jamal survived then this would be his mess to explain. How convenient he would blunder into a trap, lose half of his command and then die to ensure he doesn’t get blamed. This on top of the last raid, command will probably try to place the blame on me, he thought.

After a few minutes, in an uncharacteristically bewildered response. “Sir, there is no response.”

“None?”

“No sir, nothing, no chatter. Nothing. Nothing from Vortia either.” Vortia being the capital of the Sundaland colony and his base the only defense of the capital beyond it’s own aether spears and shielders.

“Check all communications channels and distress channels.” turning to Dimera. “What do you feel Dimera.” Did the Ramans use their brahmastras on Sundaland? They were still an hour away from Sundaland so it would be a while before they can visually inspect what happened.

“Any other vailixi in the air?” To anybody.

After a few minutes, “Sir, I have a fleet vessel on the merchant channel. The Poseidon’s Servant, sir.”

Before Risor could ask. “Audio only sir, weak signal.”

Risor sighs, now would be a good time to have a visual and higher level communications link but of course many of the merchant fleet do not even have aether enabled systems. The merchant fleet being used for commerce and regional passenger runs. The vailixi are almost all for the military or government use with just a few for global passenger runs back and forth to Atlantis. The majority of the merchant fleet are as they have been for thousands of years, wind driven surface only vessels. A few have been upgraded to use aether enabled systems that allow them to go against the wind or some even to dive but they are rare and reluctantly not what the Poseidon’s Servant is equipped with.

“Poseidon’s Servant this is Commander Tarnor of Falcon Claw squadron. Where are you and what is your situation? We have been trying to raise Vortia without any luck.”

“Commander, this be Captain Volck, we are outside of what is left of Vortia’s harbor. The city is gone, sir. We were running fruits from the Xuli tribes up north for ..” static overcomes his talking.

 

Donation Crowdsource campaign started at Indiegogo.com

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This campaign is asking for donations to help me publish the book. Lots of cool perks for your donations too!

Have had quite a few visitors to the site. If you are one of them and didn’t contribute could you please leave a comment as to why? I am curious if it’s something I can change or just wrong style. And if you have not visited or contributed, please take a look.

Thanks

Passage from book

Finalizing my crowdsource request for contributions to getting the book published on Indiegogo.com    Here is one of the passages from the book that I am using in the campaign.

Flee for your lives!

Risor awakens to the tolling of the bells and yelling coming from the streets below. Racing to the hallway, he meets other family members and servants. Everyone is demanding to know what is going on, with servants charging off in all directions to try and get some answers. Rosan orders everyone back to dress and prepare a few changes of clothes.

Maybe the Ramans have finally decided to strike the Atlantean colonies on this side of the world. Risor quickly dressed and went down to the house courtyard below. Servants were hustling back and forth with his father directing actions. A small stack of bags and such were already gathered in the courtyard.

“What is going on father?” cried Risor.

“We do not know yet but the order is to evacuate to the hills.”

In moments, an officer of the town guard comes through the front gate with one of the servants sent to find out what is going on.

“My lords, Sub-commander Ruland. We are ordering an evacuation of the city. There is a great flood coming from the north and it will be here in one to two hours. Please gather what you can easily carry and head out the Morning Gate. It will be the quickest way to the hills.” turning to Rosan. “Elder Councilman Tarnor, Councilman Zailor advises the council should meet at Sun’s Farewell bluff as soon as possible. We will maintain that as our headquarters until the crisis is over.”

“Sub-commander, what of the vailixi? I have some of my unit here.” Risor asked.

“All of the vailixi are in the air going north or to Sun’s Farewell bluff as part of the command hub. I believe that means your craft as well, sir.”

Rosan put his hand on Risor’s shoulder. “Son, I need you here to help me with our household.”

“I will stay father, but I need to make sure that my people are okay. Thank you sub-commander.” As the guardsman saluted and then left.

“Flood eh?” Risor remembered what Tolen said. “Father if this is related to what Tolen told us before, it could be very bad.”

“Yes he told us too. We need to get everyone moving.”

Within fifteen minutes, the family, servants and baggage was on the move. While not running, especially since it was still a long distance, the group moved quickly. Along with hundreds of other fleeing residents.

Within the city proper, the streets are well lit and it was easy to see dropped items that someone before them had second thoughts about taking. The streets were strewn with debris from those fleeing. Luckily for the Tarnors, their home opened onto one of the main thoroughfares and they quickly exited the city gate.

The road was lit for a ways but soon the city lights were no longer available. Hundreds were on the road to the hills with all manner of wagons or animals as beasts of burden. Risor would not mind having one of the aether wagons at this time, that would allow them to pretty much run along side the road a few feet off the ground. They couldn’t stay on the road with all the other people but as long as the ground near the road was flat they could use that.

With only star light, the occasional torch or aether light to light their way it was pretty scary for those fleeing. They moved on pretty much in silence so they can hear when the waters are coming. The silence was broken by vailixi occasionally flying overhead with their aether lights beaming along the road. The light showed how much junk was already thrown to the sides as people feared not making it and threw their belongings away to move quicker.

Risor believes they were half way to the hills when up ahead an animal bellowed and then an aether spear shot the beast. Many of the animals near Risor’s family were getting skittish, which Risor thought meant the flood is getting closer. He had heard Tolen say that animals have a sense, like those who control the use of aether, to detect when danger is coming.

When they got to where the beast was killed, they saw a group trying to remove it from the road.

“Citizens, leave it, it is to one side and there is little time. Pick up your gear and move on.” Said Rosan to the crowd.

The people didn’t seem to need much convincing, they dropped their holds on the beast and moved on.

“Father, the beast will still block any larger wagons coming up the road.” Rina finally spoke, she seemed in a state of shock since leaving their home.

“Honey, any wagon that big will not move quickly with all these people in the way and if it did, it would more than likely run people over.” When she didn’t say anything, he added, “Better that one wagon be left than many people harmed in the driver’s attempt to reach safety.” Again no response.

What about the Title?

As I am writing my story, I continue to read as much as I can about self-publishing to try and squeeze every last bit of information I can before I get to those steps. When I hit some piece of advice that I consider valuable, I look at what I am doing to see how my way compares.

One of the recent elements I have read in a few articles, is about the Title and how that can convey the mood of the book. Actually some are saying Title and cover art but I am not at that stage yet.

For my book, I think the title: Wall of Destruction  is good but then again maybe I am biased. So I would like to ask yall, what do you feel when you read that Title?

The latest article I read about this idea is from James Altucher’s The Altucher Confidential blog. In his post “How to Self-Publish a Best Seller: Publishing 3.0” he talks about the title and how he polled for different titles from his Facebook friends to pick the best one.

I will try a slightly different approach. I would like to ask if you think the title: Wall of Destruction, is intriguing enough to look further into?  If a book’s background is the destruction of a civilization because of flooding, would that be something that matches?

Would love to know what you think?

 

Status

First Happy Father’s Day to all.  Fathers and mothers having to pull double duty.

So writing my novel in OpenOffice and have around 320 pages but exporting to a PDF, I get around 160 pages. Not sure why the difference, but I assume the PDF is probably more accurate.  Figure I am a little more than half way through the story so probably closer to 300 pages for PDF when done.

Hopefully this storyline pleases yall and makes you want to read more. I have plans for a few short story/novellas diving much deeper into areas of the story or branching off to cover the story of other characters that come into this story but quickly disappear. My goal is to put together 5 shorts; the first one will be free and the next two paid.  Afterwards, I will build the last two and publish them as part of an anthology of all 5 stories.

If people are still into this storyline, I was thinking to put out another novel based on the Raman Empire’s experience of this and then probably another 5 shorts based on that novel. Kinda get you both sides of the story with some different point of views of the same events.

Of course if the storyline isn’t as popular as I would hope, then I have other story ideas to work on and I can come back to this one in the future.

Also still thinking of the crowdsourcing idea and would like to know if anyone has used that route before and what was their experience?

Til next time.

Wall of Destruction Preview – Draft Version

Wall of Destruction Preview v1

Already well into writing the novel but thought I would include a preview. It is still a draft version but I would love to get some feedback.

To publish it will require professional artwork and editing. Even more if I try to have it translated. These costs add up, so I am considering crowdsourcing. I have investigated some of the crowdsourcing sites and it seems that Indiegogo is the best international service. So comments will be invaluable.

My goal for now will be to publish it electronically.

Why is Wall of Destruction my first book?

DSC02606A few years ago I picked up a book by Graham Hancock called “Fingerprints of the Gods” that changed the way I thought of history. I have been a history nut since my school days but in this book Mr. Hancock challenged the orthodox views of how civilization progressed. I was hooked.

Many of the arguments made sense to me and I started reading more from Mr. Hancock and others that wrote of similar views. One of the biggest challenges to these views was, “where is the evidence?” Many things mentioned by these writers had little corroborating information or not enough to stir the archaeological community to further investigate.

Where is the evidence? Maybe in the ocean. Since the last ice age, sea levels have risen over 150 feet globally. Large swaths of land that used to be shore side are now under tens or hundreds of feet of water. The Persian Gulf used to be a river valley, Florida used to be about twice its size, Sundaland was a landmass that included large swaths of Southeast Asia and the Gulf of Mexico was half its size and more a bay with small waterways connecting it to the Atlantic Ocean.

Then you look at human nature and you notice that we really love to build cities near the coast or along rivers. We always have. Almost all ancient cities were near bodies of water because we need water to survive. Especially nice places were river deltas, building a city as close as you can to a delta really gave you an advantage. The land is more fertile, you have access to the seas and trade. Just a sweet place to put down some roots.

Until the sea levels rise that is. Once the seas start flooding your crops or even your house, it tends to make the place uninhabitable and less desirous. Storms cause more damage and water gets caught in tidal pools that, due to stagnation, might cause disease and all that other fun stuff.

If you do have cities, you have specialization of skills. I myself am an IT engineer, not a farmer or hunter. I might have some of those skills or learn quickly but what if I am dropped into an area without more than I can carry? If I left in a hurry, did I bring an axe? food? water? clothes? If I did, did every one else? Will I have to fend off other starving people for the food and tools I did bring? If I am fending them off, can I continue to feed myself?

Leaving the environs of a city quickly might also cause the loss of industry and the devaluing of specialization. Can you make the tools you need or did the tooling systems you require sink with the city? Could you even stay in large, organized groups? Might you have to break up into smaller and smaller groups to have a chance to feed your group? Non-survival skills then become unused and eventually forgotten.

How could a civilization die? I think these could be causes of an advanced society reverting to hunter gatherers. Just need to find some evidence of city remains. The cool thing is they are starting to look in the oceans and are finding things that are questioning the current story of man.

This is one of the premises in Wall of Destruction, a “When Atlantis Fell” saga. Something happens to cause the cities to be abandoned and the survivors need to learn to “go native” to survive. As this is a book of fiction, I also took the liberty of using stories of Atlantis and other ancient  tales to build my civilizations.

I will add more about it in the coming posts.