WIP: Response from Launch Pad Competition

So I finally got a response to my entry. Needless to say, I did not place, but I am happy with the Notes I received. I submitted excerpts from my book and that seemed to be a bad thing. They said show them the action but I guess it was not to mean, literally, show action scenes only. Lesson learned!

I tried to streamline the novel to read more like a screen play but they said they want more background in the novel. Fair enough.

Lots of work to do. I have the background but need to figure out how to flesh out the story again but not weigh down the story’s flow.

I think what I will do is return to the first novel and rewrite it with these notes in mind. Then I will write the Pilot screenplay and outline the rest of the novel for a season one of the trilogy. Will try both Hollywood and book publishers again once that is done.

Here are the Notes they sent.  Hopefully it can help someone by showing things that industry folks look for. I can definitely see the benefit of going to school for this, but for some of us older folks, that is not practical.

I would love to hear what you feel these notes meant. Doesn’t hurt having a second opinion.

FeedbackNotes

The samples provided are excerpts or vignettes rather than a full 50 pages of straight text in the order of the story’s progressions so it’s difficult to get a good idea of the overall arc of the story and its timeline. A whole world is introduced in this story yet I don’t know what it looks like, the kind of time period the people are living in, the kind of technology they have available, etc. Unfortunately the sample lacks that set-up that establishes the world in which “Empires Fall” takes place.

As far as the excerpts are concerned, they contain intriguing scenarios and introduce compelling story arcs and characters, however often gloss over backstory which is necessary to build a foundation. For instance, in the first excerpt, “Arctic Icepack,” we’re told briefly that “Indrajit is a God anointed hero.” As well as that his comrade Zhenjin witnessed his anointing. However, this is glossed over in just three sentences. Perhaps there is more in an excerpt not included here, but the brief mention in the current scenario when the audience is already invested in Indrajit’s observation and attack on the researchers is distracting.

If more detail is not going to be provided to explain this here, its inclusion is confusing. It’s one thing to refer to Indrajit by a nickname, but wholly another to almost provide an explanation of the name which falls short.

Due to the structure of the sample, the time line of “EmpiresFall” is unclear, as are the main themes, tone, and the primary focus of the story. And due to the lack of detail, the excerpts come across as summaries of a larger story than as small pieces taken from an existing manuscript. Where is the detailed history of these two societies?Why are they at war, what are they fighting about?

Further, since we know so little about them/who they are, it’s difficult to invest in or care about what’s happening in the lives of the characters. For material to be capable of adaptation, especially from novel to film, there needs to exist a steady, broad foundation. Is the world of “Empires Fall” enticing and compelling? Are there characters that can carry such a weighty story?

As of now, the manuscript doesn’t offer a visually enticing presentation of this world (visual being the keyword, as film is a visual medium. Will “Empires Fall” translate to the screen?) nor does it offer a clear interpretation of the characters. How can this be improved? Include detail–focus on the description of the scenario (where are the characters, what does the scene look like how did they get there, what are their motivations, etc.) A narrative will almost always contain more than what is needed for the adaptation – the content of the film script has to come from some where. The back story of a narrative informs that script. “Empires Fall” also seems to get its inspiration from existing genre shows such as “Game of Thrones” which shows in some of the dialogue (e.g. Tilor’s name for Lena, “sun and moon” and the emphatic “by the gods” statements). While it’s perfectly fine to be inspired by existing content, be sure to give “Empires Fall” your own voice and flavor.

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Launch Pad Manuscript Competition.

So getting down to the wire for the final entry. Missed my deadline for the previous submission deadline because I was not happy with the synopsis. I feel better about this one and thought I would ask all for thoughts on how it sounds.

Some notes on the format.  First time a major character is mentioned, the name is all in caps,  JIM. Afterwards it would be normal, Jim.

Also this synopsis is to be one page only. Reluctantly, I have used exactly one page so adding more material is not possible unless I remove stuff.  I will include 48 other pages of passages from the book. The goal is to get them excited enough with the synopsis to read the rest of the submission.

The passages from the book are sequential but not a complete progression through the story. I decided to take passages that hopefully would show the action of the story.

Lastly, I do identify this as book one of a trilogy.  So hopefully that will help.

Thoughts?

 

Empires Fall Synopsis

For 30,000 years, Atlantis grew from small city to global empire. Poseidon blessed them with the secret of Aether, which powers their advanced technologies. First coming as friends and teachers, many considered them as gods. Soon they started to believe they were gods and friendship turned to lordship.

An alliance grew to stand against them, led by the Empire of Rama. The Gods of the alliance favored their followers with heroes of great might to combat the technologies of Atlantis.

For 10 years war has raged across the Ice Age world. In the last year, Atlantis turns to Aether weapons of immense destructiveness.

RISOR, a vailixi squadron commander, finds himself fighting the enemy and JANA, his political rival. Her animosity peaks as he questions the wisdom of her leading a WMD strike against the Rama Empire home cities. This led to the Rama Empire retaliating.

With cities being destroyed, Rama’s capacity for war diminishes. A last ditch effort by Rama sends, INDRAJIT, a hero of Rama, to the Arctic ice packs. His mission is to breach the ice walls, in the hope the flood waters would doom Atlantis.

Woken in the middle of the night, Risor and the citizens of Altai flee for their lives. The floods inundate the coastal areas of the world, ruining Atlantis and most of their colonies.

Atlantis demands a recall of most military forces to strike back. An act that would leave most colonies defenseless. Many colonies refuse the order and rebel. SHANDAR, another squadron commander, leads his people in open revolt against Atlantis. While Risor’s people decide to abandon their city and hide. In the end, they both realize they can not openly fight their former masters.

ROGAT, an infantry officer, takes charge of a group of survivors, abandoned by Atlantis and chased by the enemy. They are chased to a mountain stronghold, where they are trapped.

With the empire in chaos, LENA, the girlfriend of Risor’s lieutenant, has her colony attacked by Greek raiders. She is taken as a slave. After rebuffing the Greek leader many times, he gives her to a cruel ally. She is spared being raped or worse by an attacking Atlantean force.

Jana is sent to Altai and discovers that Risor’s people have fled. Her forces quickly find Risor and in the climatic battle, Risor’s people bring down her vailixi. She realizes it is him but is unable to do anything. His people escape and while Jana rages impotently, her master recalls her to Atlantis for a new operation.

New Idea: Fight of Ages

While I work on my epic adventure story about the downfall of Atlantis, I have recently started loving the epic music of Two Steps From Hell. I like to write to it, which is really cool when I am doing an action scene.

It also struck me as Cirque du Soleil-ish in their shows. In fact, the game play videos that the link above is mated to started to give me ideas.

Imagine.

The venue is a enclosed stadium, with three quarters of the seating available. The stage is the field below that backs up to a mountain that encompasses the last quarter of the stadium.

Up and way in the back of the mountain is an orchestra and band blaring out epic songs that are piped through the stadiums speakers. The seats occasionally vibrate to the beat of the music.

Closer to the crowds, high over head are singers belting out the vocals of the songs. Angelic voices that tear at the heart or stir the emotions to the action below.

A massive fight scene develops on the stage or stadium field. Some participants are doing aerial jumps over their opponents. The stadium is darkened and parts of the action are highlighted with spot lights while others fade out to near darkness. In the back are the heroes, yet to enter the fray.

They carry on a conversation that the audience can hear through speakers near their ears.

Suddenly the stadium’s speaker blast a monstrous roar. Clouds of smoke start to bellow above the field of battle and a massive laser-drawn winged dragon appears above the battle. It beats it’s wings and the audience feels the wind stir around their faces.

The dragon looks at the heroes and talks to them via the chair speaker. It threatens to incinerate the audience. The dragon turns to the audience and inhales. One of the heroes knows magic and casts a large shield over the audience. The dragon’s fire blast rolls over the audience, as heated wind, hitting their faces with chairs shaking. A large laser light display acts as the shield blocking the majority of the fire.

This angers the dragon that then turns his attention on the battle below. A blast on the field furthest from the mountain causes another wave of heat to hit the audience. Fire engulfs the combatants. The combatants have disappeared, when the audience can see again, vaporized by the dragon fire’s intense heat.

The main hero yells No! and starts to run up the mountain towards the audience. The dragon turns to look at him and starts to inhale for another blast. The warrior leaps into the air. With his massive sword first, he is as an arrow, aimed to the heart of the dragon.

The dragon blasts flow around the hero, protected by his magic. The warrior pierces the dragon in a massive explosion of laser, light and pyrotechnics. The blast encompasses the audience with wind and a rumbling of the chairs. All of the combatants are floored from the destruction of the dragon.

 

So a theater production that takes Cirque du Soleil + Final Fantasy, to the music of Two Steps From Hell, sprinkle laser lights and active chairs (like Disney’s A Bug’s Life chairs).

I figure a two hour show with an intermission. Probably five different stories tied together via a few similarities like Final Fantasy does between stories. Something that can work on the same stage props (mostly the same). Acrobatic fight scenes with an overhead system that allows characters to do massive jumps over their opponents in the fights.  Like the games or fantastic martial art type movie scenes.

Use the active chairs when something happens on stage. This would allow for giving the audience an experience beyond just watching the action on the stage. For example, a blast of fire washes over the audience (a small blast of hot air directed to the face of the seated audience) or chairs that rock back when a particular event occurs on the stage.

Also the actors voices could be projected through speakers in the chairs. This would allows the “din” of the battle, the music of the orchestra/band/vocals to be projected differently. Maybe these would come from the stadium/theaters speakers while the main characters would speak in the voices that best projects the emotions of the part (maybe pre-recorded).

Yes I love to dream.

WiP: Completed draft of first book of trilogy!

Finally got pass this hurdle. Completed the first book of the trilogy (First draft). Only took me a year to do. Reluctantly, I was not as productive as I would like to have been but its done.

I am rewriting the book that I published in 2014. In 2015, I wrote a screen play of the story but modified large parts of the story to work in a movie. I liked what I did so much, I decided to rewrite it, extend it and add sub-plots to it.

My goal is to write all three books, then write screen plays of them, and finally, modify the books to conform to the screen plays. If I am lucky, get Hollywood to purchase the story and book publishers to make the books.

 

Log Lines for My Projects

So I have hit a writer’s block on my “When Atlantis Fell” novel. Instead of continuing to stare at the screen and hope the novel will write itself, I decided to try something else.

I have a few projects I am working on. Mostly at lunch, when I am bored of the Atlantis story or when I day-dream about the one of the stories and I just have to write something.

My exercise today will be around Log Lines. Why not try out a few log lines for each of the current works. A log line being a short 20-60 word description for the story. These are the first things that agents and producers would look at.  For many folks, consider it the elevator pitch.

While most of these are not ready for prime time, if any of them really strike you, please let me know.  Maybe the Atlantis stories are not the ones I should be primarily working on.

Title: When Atlantis Fell    (trilogy)

Book 1: A squadron commander becomes the unlikely leader of a break away colony from war ravaged Atlantis. The problem is Atlantis is not willing to let go and sends his rival to hunt him and the rebels down.

Book 2: The rebuilding of Atlantis brings about the death of many old ways. Some in the military believe that includes the emperor and the remnants of those who pushed for peace. The fiery commander who chased down rebels, will now lead the fight with the old guard.

Book 3: With the destruction of Atlantis and the new government installed at Luxa, the job of hunting down and retaking the rebel colonies is given to Jana. The rebels know Luxa will not let them go and decide to band together to attack Luxa before they are too strong.

Title: WormHole Earth Universe, no title yet.

She was just an astrophysicist working for the Explorer’s Guild, mapping out new star systems. Until she vaguely remembers discovering an alien race. Then her world becomes a desperate race to remember what happened and, hopefully, why someone wants to kill her.

Title: Empire Earth – working title.

Earth’s supposed friends are not so friendly, as found out by a young scientist on his way to a galactic academy for new space faring races. Unable to mind his own business, the scientist struggles to find a way to get a message back to warn Earth.

Title:  Saviors

They came and slapped Earth into order. They taught us many technologies and let us explore the nearby systems. Then the truth came out. They were running from a more powerful race and we were just cannon fodder to slow the enemy down. Until we decided not to be.

Title: The Last Artist

In the world of Kotor, artist can create masterpieces of magical power. Each one takes part of their soul and after the last one is made, they die. In time, unscrupulous nobles made artists create masterpieces for them with no concern for the artist’s life. So they went into hiding. One young swordmaker was discovered. He and his companions decided to stand and fight rather than run and hide.

When Atlantis Fell Update

A good writing day today.  Wrote over 6,000 words for a total of 35,000+ now. The goal is to make a trilogy, books and screen plays by the end of the year.  I figure about 90,000 words per book of the trilogy and 25,000 words for each screen play.

A long way to go, maybe 350,000 words total and I am only 10% of the way but I am confident I can still hit my goal. What is 350,00 words?  About three Harry Potter books or two and a half of The Lord of the Ring trilogy.

Of course to stay on track, I have to have a lot more of these good writing days than days I do nothing but stare at the computer.  Also there are edits, edits and more edits.

The fun is just beginning!

Saviors: A new Sci-Fi Universe

I have started another universe based on an idea I have had about an alien race coming to Earth and “uplifting” us to a space faring race.  Some would say why would anyone ever do something like that.  Most people are not that kind. Ah, but what if its not really out of kindness but because they have a need?

This novel will start with the aliens telling us why they are giving us a hand up. Let me know what you think?

Saviors

They came as civilizers, they said. Ya, civilization always screws the natives. In this case, we, humanity, are the natives. The Valodars came 10 years ago to much fanfare. Acting all high and mighty, they first tried to change us by appealing to our nobler side. Well, we never really were good at listening. So they then forced our primitive cultures to stop warring and fall under a one world government.

That showed us their true nature. They can kick ass with the best of em. They did a good job of destroying most of our military forces in a quick and violent set of strikes. Before we even knew what hit us, we were trashed and at their mercy. They then brought down their armored troops and made us see the errors of our ways.

Ya, civilized. The more civilized one gets the more violent the destruction they reap.

But then the Valodars or squidlies as we started to call them, shocked the shit out of us. Once they forced us into a one world government of their choosing, they started to teach us their technology. In the 6 years since our “education” began, we have been given warp capabilities, alright they call it phased translocation. But it still seems like Star Trek.

They helped us build star ships that could move around the solar system in hours. They gave us powerful propulsion systems, artificial gravity, nano technology, many wonderful technologies. They showed us how we can control these systems with our minds.

We have sent explorer ships to the neighboring stars and have found planets that could support life. We were planning on colonies light years away. Building space stations and habitats on the other planets in our system, Sol.

These were heady times. Man had found a true friend that freed us from our terrestrial bonds.

Or so we thought.

Another Idea for Writing

How to get my works seen by as many people as possible?

I think this is a question that many writers face. The more you try to market your book the less time you have writing the next one.  Of course, the more you write, the less chance others will see your work. There are just too many choices out there.

You need to write a good story, have an eye-catching cover and tons of good luck.  What else can help?

Well, a marketing plan helps. Getting your book in front of as many people as possible helps. The more that see your work the more chance of having someone purchase your book. It is getting people to see your book, that is the hard part.

I am not an internet marketing genius and kinda lazy to boot. I have tried to build followings on Twitter or Facebook but do not seem to have much success. So I wanted to try another way.

I have submitted my story (revised) to Hollywood to see if that works. So far that isn’t working either. It is still only a few weeks since I submitted my query letter, so not sure where that leaves me. I thought that if I can get someone to go for my story, I might be able to sell more books.  That still might work but maybe in the future.

One of the things I have read many times from many writers was to keep writing. Write more stories to get more chances for a reader to see your work. If a reader enjoys one book, there is a good chance they might buy another and another. I like this approach because I can keep writing. I still need readers to find my stuff among all the others but this is more what a lazy person like me would enjoy.

Taking a note from a youtube video from S. J. Scott about using Kindle Publishing, the goal is to produce a lot of books and share the news. What I plan on doing with this idea would be to keep writing my full length novels but also take time to create shorter novellas/novelletes about some of the background histories.

With Atlantis and the Wall of Destruction, I mention that Atlantis has been around for 30,000 years. That is plenty of events to write about in short stories or novellas. I will take some of these stories and turn them into 20-60 page booklets that I can put out via Kindle Publishing. They will have under one dollar pricing and will refer back to the major novels.

Hopefully, if people like these stories, then they will continue to buy other stories of mine.  These smaller booklets will be part of my marketing plan to get readers to read the larger novels. I believe this strategy is something that many writers could do. Many probably have additional stories or plot lines that they removed from the published novel because of one reason or another. If afterwards, they develop those stories, then they could create additional income streams and have multiple chances for readers to see their work.

To summarize. Do no just write a story. Create the world and build around the main story you want to tell.  Use these other stories to add to your marketing efforts. On the ocean of books to read, one book is but a small ripple to notice. Many books becomes a wave that gets noticed.

Empire Earth: A New Universe to play with

Premise:  Earth unites around a one world government the hard way – war. In 2033, the earth is united under the banner of the Earth Federation. The earth becomes a Type 1 civilization that can harness their planet and can reach interplanetary space.

This now identifies the inhabitants of Sol’s 3rd planet to have breached the barrier to InterStellar relations. The protocol that the Zshu set up millions of years ago means that advanced civilizations can interact. In all the ways that that little word can mean. The Zshu, the ancient ones that ascended to another evolutionary level but impose their rule on this one, declared that there are certain levels of interaction that can occur between civilizations, at different stages of advancement.

The Mjor are an old race that preys on new Type 1 civilizations. There are many races in the Milky Way like the Mjor but they are one of the original bad guys. The Mjor have learned to prosper within the guidelines that the Zshu have set. One of the Zshu’s rules is that particular type civilizations can not destroy or control lower types. The Mjor can not destroy or conquer the human species because of it’s primitive state. The law does allow Humanity to seek protection by the Mjor and then the Mjor can do as they wish, as long as they do not destroy Humanity.

So with that premise, I have already started a timeline.  Not much yet and I have my When Atlantis Fell and Worm Hole Earth universes to work on as well.  I plan on doing a series on the Mjor-Humanity interactions but also many sub-plots or short stories.

With that, here is the beginning of the timeline:

Year Event
2015 Global war starts with NATO invading Russia over a flare up in Ukraine. Initially driving deep into Russia, the allies are beaten back by long supply lines and millions of chinese soldiers who join Russia. India also joins this alliance as NATO stirs up animosity with heavy handed miscues against India. A Chinese general helps the Eastern Alliance to stem the actions of NATO.
2016 The Eastern Alliance relies on large quantities of low tech systems to combat the NATO’s technological advantage. The Eastern Alliance invades and takes most of South East Asia and Australia. South Korea and Japan join the Eastern Alliance after US forces in those countries are eventually defeated and the US seems to go into a defensive mode in the Pacific.. In Europe, the Eastern Alliance moves the battle lines back towards the Russian border with overwhelming numbers.
2017 The Eastern Alliance and NATO open up fronts in Africa. While not completely safe, the Indian Ocean becomes an Eastern Alliance controlled ocean, facilitating the delivery of war supplies and troops to Africa while bringing back Africa’s resources to the industrial base of the Eastern Alliance. The NATO alliance also start to invade South American countries in a preventive measure. With most of their force fighting in Europe and Africa, the South American nations band together into the Federated States of America (FSA). The FSA is supported by the Eastern Alliance and the NATO Alliance is stopped at the Panama Canal with large guerilla forces operating throughout Central America.
2018 Eastern Alliance Generals Kurchatov and Li Shou prove unbeatable for the NATO Alliance. The problem is they can not be everywhere. Kurchatov defends the Russian front while Li Shou fights in southern Africa. NATO pushes into the Sinai with a combined invasion and strike along the Mediterranean coast. The US also breaks through the Panama Canal and enters Venezuela . On the Russian front, the NATO Alliance pushes back towards Volgograd in a move reminiscent of WWII. The massive forces push into the city of Volgograd to be met by stiff resistance in street fighting. After 2 month of beating back the Eastern Alliance forces to take the city, the ultimate trap is unleashed. The Eastern Alliance had planted massive bombs in the city and still have large quantities of artillery in range. In little over a week, massive missile and artillery barrages with the underground bombs destroy a large NATO force. At the same time a costly offensive is started all along the Russian front by the Eastern Alliance. Simliar offensives are started in South Africa and South America. At the end of the year the NATO Alliance is pushed back towards the borders they had at the beginning of the year.
2019 The Eastern Alliance learns to manipulate gravity into a shield. This technology projects a field of gravity so strong around a device that incoming missiles, shells and lasers are stopped before reaching the target. It literally crushes objects and bends laser light. The Eastern Alliance puts gravity projectors around the surviving cities and industrial bases. Due to the massive amounts of power required, This technology could not be used for military forces. NATO could not penetrate the shields. The Eastern Alliance starts to concentrate industrial might around cities that have these shields.
2020 NATO forces start deploying hand held rail gun technology that starts to cause problems for the Eastern Alliance and FSA. In a desperate attempt to counter this technology, the Eastern Alliance builds an orbital space ship. NATO tries to stop the launch of the ship with nuclear weapons but is thwarted by the gravity shields. Once the ship obtains orbit, it destroys all NATO satellite systems it finds with its rail guns. Using its gravity shield, the EAS Victory defeats the NATO Alliance’s space station, utterly destroying it. Utilizing kinetic rounds, the EAS Victory pounds capitals of many NATO member states. Peace is offered with heavy penalties to the NATO Alliance. NATO accepts.
2021 The Moscow Peace Treaty signed by all parties. NATO must leave Africa and return Central America to the FSA. They also had to give up much technology they developed. This total sell out was deemed better than destruction by kinetics.
2023 General Li Shou trades in his uniform and becomes the President of the Eastern Alliance. This becomes a federated state of all member states have limited powers. The FSA formerly joins the Eastern Alliance which is renamed the Earth Federation. The Earth Federation embarks on a massive program to build cities underground, build a larger space presence and re arm their military with laser and rail gun technology. Li Shou pushes for a new language to developed based on English so all members of the Earth Federation can talk to each other. The one common language for most of the Federation is English. The NATO alliance is limited in their improvements due to the constraints put on them by the peace treaty.
2029 The Earth Federation establishes two space stations in high earth orbit. Using their gravity based technology, they not only build shields but also provide their stations and ships with artificial gravity. There are 10 war ships and the new mining ships that search the asteroid belt for valuable objects.
2032 War erupts between the US and Europe. The NATO alliance is broken. The war starts over the Earth Federations offer to invite NATO to be part of the Federation. The US refuses the offer but many European nations want to join the Federation. In the years since WWW3, the NATO alliance has steady diminished cut off from the rest of the worlds resources and not allowed to leave the planet. The stronger nations used the weaker ones for their raw resources. Many nations of central and southern Europe did not like the situation and jumped at the chance of joining the Federation which has improved the living standards of many. President Li Shou had proven a leader of great vision. Bettering his people, making them learn the new Common tongue but allowing them to keep their mother tongues and rebuilding a professional military.
2033 The Earth Federation joins the war against the US, France, Germany, UK and Poland alliance. Before major Earth Federation ground forces engage the enemy, the Federation Fleet uses kinetics to destroy most of the war and industrial capacity of the Alliance. The war ends with the entire world part of the Earth Federation.
2034 The Federation’s Tranquility Moon Base becomes operational.
2035 A UFO enters the Sol system and stops around Jupiter. The Federation Navy tracks the device and sees that it is a ship of some sort. The Federation commissions another 10 ships and arms the stations. A crash project is made to get the former NATO Alliance populations in underground cities along with all those that had yet to be relocated.
2036 A probe is set towards the space ship is destroyed as it gets within 1 million kms of the ship. Later in the year 10 more ships come in the the system and meet up with the original.

Worm Hole Earth: Background – Military History Part 2

A continuation of the military history of the Republic of Man, then the Solarian Empire.

In the 2240s, the Republic started to experiment with remote controlled ships. Controlled via the rings, so the idea of living quarters was no longer a consideration. The military also grasped this idea with a passion. The idea was to build massively dense ships that consisted mostly of an engine, sensors and weapons systems surrounded by a solid metal shell. No crew quarters and only a Ring room (normally in engineering with Jrings for artificial gravity) with passageways to the weapons and sensor locations. These passageways were deep within the armor of the craft, with only their weapons ports showing. While the sensors were near the surface of the craft, the weapons systems were deep in the shell, with massive turret type armor systems around them. This would slow the slewing of the weapon but would provide a massively protected weapon platform.

When the military started putting more ring weapons on these vessels, they built passageways out to the skin of the ship for maintenance of the rings. Then, someone came up with the idea of putting the rings in the turrets. A mechanism was built that would house many rings, that hosted different weapon systems. When a weapon was called for, the device would turn the correct ring towards the firing port. This meant the system could keep up a massive amount of firepower, over a long time. Since surface weapon rings were vulnerable to damage, it was decided to build many turrets, massive and smaller ones all over the ship.

For the larger battleships, 8 massive turrets were built and 16 smaller ones. The massive turrets had the weapons carousel, while the smaller ones would have just a single ring. Most of these smaller turrets would in the time of the Empire, connect to stations that would be able to connect many different types of weapons to the ring but would take more time in doing so. The massive turrets had rings that could be served by many different locations.

In the 25th Century, the ships would have hangar bays for remote controlled fighters and bombers. These systems would also have rings in them. Their weapons ports were ring weapons and their control was ring based. Due to their size, the rings were smaller and could not use the same ring weapons that the larger ships used. These fighters were extremely powerful since they could still pump out gigawatts of laser power or fire an almost unlimited number of missiles or projectiles. They were basically a large engine with enough fuel storage capacity to keep the engine running. The rest of the fuel was provided via ring fuel systems.

In the battleship’s hangar bays, there were a few ring ports and Jring gravity systems. When flight ops was called for, a flight crew was sent forth to care for any damaged fighters or to move them into position. While this could have been handled by robots or a complex mechanical system, it was thought that EMP would probably disable the system or the robots were not monitored enough. Man was still worried about AI taking over. Damaged craft that could not be fixed on the hangar deck were pushed through one of the Rings to a fighter depot back in Imperial space. When fighters were destroyed, new ones could be sent through to the hangar bay.

Since there was still the problem of passing rings through rings, additional rings were stored, in the hangar bays, in EMP-protected store rooms. The human crew was only present when flight ops were initiated. These were normally done well before ship to ship combat was initiated. The fighters would be sent out first to either attack before the ships or to try and flank the enemy. Some would be kept back, to help with the area defense, but most were released to attack.