First draft completed

Yeah!!!   Finished the first draft.  Now the editing.

Might have more to add though, I have been reading a lot of stuff lately that jumps between different story lines and I kinda like that. Not too crazy, but may be between two or three characters. Hoping for an October completion date and then see what I can do about getting a professional edit of the book.

 

Here is another snippet from the “Wall of Destruction”

That evening Risor decided to contact New Altai. The communications ring was nearly drained, so he had to keep the contact short and audio only.

Milo was on duty at the time, “Sir, it is good to hear from you again. How are things going?”

Risor said, “Good to hear from you too, Milo. We are doing better. I don’t think we are being followed anymore but we are still being cautious. How are you and our new city?”

“Doing fine sir, the people are still getting used to doing things the new way but settling in. Where are you now?”

“We believe we are about three weeks out still. Near the foothills of the mountains but heading north now. How is my family?”

“Glad to hear that sir. Your family is fine, I will tell them that you are well. Fordo and his group are about a week away, they estimate.”

“Glad to hear that. No enemy contact? For you or Fordo?”
“No sir, they are having a grand old time.”

“Good, hope we can start doing that. How is Demara?”

Chuckling, Milo said, “Demara, eh? Not the rest of us? I was wondering why she was acting that way last time you checked in.”

“What do you mean, my friend?”

“You will see when you get here.”

Risor sighed, “I see. Okay if you are going to be that way.” Laughing, “I need to close this now. The ring’s power is almost gone. I might not be able to check in for a while. I figure another week or two then we will. Take care my friend.”

Milo said, “You too sir, be safe.”

Risor stared at the ring for a minute after breaking the connection. He was thinking of Demara and remembering her face from the last visual call they had. Yes, he would like to see her again and see what Milo was talking about.

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Jim

Living in Japan, the land of Anime, the Samurai, the ultra modern and extremely old. These contrasting themes fuel my worlds. Both the ancient and new meld together into worlds where super-powered school kids defeat evil; forest spirits help or fight humans; and giant, futuristic robots battle to save civilization. Where else to live for inspiration! A screenwriter and novelist living in the suburbs of Tokyo. A love of history, space and science in general and the beauty of life inspire his tales. He is currently writing an epic adventure trilogy about the downfall of Atlantis.

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